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Comments of chapter undefined of Gravity Falls: The Lord of Darkness

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The transition between thoughts and conversations is much better, you could try narrating in 3rd person to give a broader perspective to the narration, good job you are doing well.

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Yes, definitely

deadly_orange:Yeah I think I will start switching between perspectives maybe every once in a while give someone else's perspective do you think this might be a good idea