Comments of chapter undefined of Unknowingly Lost

i love it! the suspense is killing me! inwill binge after i finish writing hahaha

Congratz on winning contest ! The beginning is good in building suspense !

One advice, cut down on d chunk of text. Break them into btw 3-6 lines to give ur readers fluent read. And you should separate her though using 'Calm down it is just a dream... Just blood bags and nothing more,' she encouraged herself, trying to get the pictures out of her mind. Something like that. So we can distinguish d writer and the character cos it almost made it seem as though it was her POV. U can delete after u have read, if u don't want this here.

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this gif fits my expression perfectly

Okay! This is only the beginning and it makes me want mooooreeee!!! So good!

My oh my- Now that's a start that gets your heart racing.

OKAY THIS WAS QUITE THE BEGINNINGGGG OOOOF

This is so good!!

Honestly not bad so far

Okay, I could literally hear my heartbeat as if I was in the scene.

woah! congrats!!!

😱honestly my heart is beating crazily. It is like I am watching some horror mve. phew..... need some cool water to clear my throat.... Amazing....

For a first-timer, this is good!!! I enjoyed every bit of this chapter 👀👀👀👀

Oh my, It already catched my attention!

Ohh it was so intriguing!

This is very good for first time writing. This first chapter sets down a nice plot. Be careful when you switch tenses though, other than that, nice beginning!

Good going dear, keep it up

Wow, my avid reader and supporter is contesting. First time writing... Go for it. I am proud of you girl. Nice story. If u are on discord, message me @BaeVida#7167.

See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza