Comments of chapter undefined of The Great Demon System
The Great Demon System
Drip
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Though I agree, as a writer, I too find it hard to just 'Gloss over or Shorten' such expansive scenes. What you also must realize is as a contracted writer such as my good friend and fellow artist of words Drip here, mate has deadlines and quotas to reach. So my sympathies go out to You Drip, I know writing can be full of difficulties. My novel is hilariously the polar opposite of yours
Drip:I see... thank you so much for letting me know! đ I'll try my best to never repeat such a mistake again! I am extremely sorry for the disturbing material. idk how I would make it up to you guys. I have taken the advice to heart and vow to better myself in the future. Thank you for your understanding! đ
my vampire system is the reference. test 112 hydrochloric acid. im glad you stopped dissing it. and you do need to cut some filler. not much otherwise you will lose depth. also need to wrap this arc up by introducing a new villain. preferably an organization or a different race. I would start with an organization and then work my way up from there. he needs to be challenged. this is where you lack severely as an author. the organization would be great if it was some kind of church. the torture bit is losing its shock factor so I would start to weed that out.they say that the eyes are the windows of the soul. but I've always felt that its so much easier to see the soul of an author. I see you
I get that many people thought that the R*pe scenes were too much and i kinda agree but i really didnât care that much about Natalia since she was already introduced as a âvillainâ and we already knew about MCâs personality when it comes to enemies, indeed it was a very sensitive topic to touch but i actually think that it was well executed, a little dragged to my taste but imo the scenes were well placed and narrated but in the future maybe donât go too deep into details since it is still a very sensitive topic and the author will be walking in eggshells
