Comments of chapter undefined of One Piece: Finally Free
One Piece: Finally Free
TheEnlightenedSage
Chapter comments88
Interesting start I liked it. The only thing is I feel like the parents were a little too prideful and logical for drug addicts. They wouldn't care about how they speak to them as long as he gave them money for drugs. A scene where they hold up the little brother as hostage while asking for more money and when he couldn't give it to them they killed the little brother in front of him before they kill each other would have been good. I feel it would have made more sense that way but that's just my opinion, I still liked the beginning and looking forward to the rest.
I like the idea but the execution could be done better, the mc doesn't feel real and the parent motivation of drugs could've been done better like instead of killing the brother they could've tried to sell him you know like the horrible parents they are. And the mc doesn't feel real because they just let the parents do what they want using the little brother and a hostage. However they could just run away together to the police or something. I'm not asking you to change anything and I know it's highly unlikely these characters will be used ever again, but they could've helped flesh out the mc more instead of their only character trait being protective older sibling and hard worker.
