The World Undone

There are a few language mistakes in here that make some parts hard to understand. The plot is very interesting. The author is great at writing realistic dialogue and showing relationship dynamics but could improve on describing thoughts and feelings to give the characters more depth. Keep up the good work!

I enjoyed the story so far what I have read. Every chapter may be lengthy but I am up for it. Not everyone may like a lengthy chapter, as I have learned along the way. Though, the quality of writing and character development is outstanding. The story is good as a whole and you are up for a great time reading it. Your imagination will be activated !!! Enjoy the reading 'coz I did !!!

although i am not much of a fantasy reader but this book is really good!!! the story is portrayed really well!! i would recommend this book to all of you guys out there!!! keep it up! can’t wait for the upcoming updates<3

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I honestly don’t know what to say... I really don’t know what to say. The story’s developing pace is amazing; it slows down a little, in important parts, but goes a little faster in less-than necessary details. Meaning, it’s not slow paced, nor fast paced. The settings, and the actions are vague, but I mean, it still gives you enough, and describes enough that, you can somehow imagine the rest on your own. By any means, the author didn’t really have any, “holes”, it’s just that, when he/she described a street, the bustling of the streets weren’t really needed to be said, you kinda just imagined it ok your own. Which is, I think due to the pace of the story; really cool though. The one thing is, if you aren’t really into modern, or urban genres, it may be really hard to get into, which was for me, but, perseverance is needed. I promise you that it’ll all be worth it, in the end. Oh, P.S; Is it boring? Nope. Like any other story, there’s going to be a part where, it’ll be a little less exciting than the previous, or first chapter.

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Unlike some who would just drop a "I love your story so much!", Well except if they've reviewed your book before then it's fine. I'll go straight to the point. I love the setting your story portrays, magical realm, adventure. The synopsis is spot on, really got my attention! I personally love Fantasy novels! Will be adding this to my reading list. All being said, keep up the good work.

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I just read it and I totally loved it. The writing style is good. Characters r lively... N updates r contant... It's well written n very good to read.

What in the world is this book! Read it. You will not be disappointed. Like wow. This has made my day better. Wowww This book is so freaking amazing

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It's an overall high potential book. I was a bit lost at the start but as I continued the story got clearer and more fun. Very nicely detailed.

Very nice fantasy novel with a mix of adventure. 👌 I liked it. Hope for regular updates dear author. Keep updating new chapters 😁. Loved it. Keep it up.

I really enjoyed this! Creative story! The only advice I will give you is to punctuate your dialogue. You only end it with "" and no periods or comas. You have an amazing book!

The plot is very interesting to me, especially since I’m into fantasy novels. The sentences and grammars are also good, and I don’t see any problem. I especially like the conversations between the characters since it was a mix of humor and their attitude. But you could break down the long paragraphs, that would be much better to read. Other than, it’s a good read if you’re a fantasy reader.

I love your explanation in particular. Really takes us to the exact scene. 👍👍. It isn't easy to write fantasy because of need for high details. You did great

I love the interactions between the characters! Honestly, in the 2nd chapter, I was laughing silly since I found a BL material. (Lol fujoshi mind. sorry.) Can't wait to read more! That said, this is now in my library.

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