Reviews of What? A Group Chat?
What? A Group Chat?
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and yet, the author repeats the mistakes of other idiots. WHY ADD AN ORIGINAL CHARACTER FROM THE ORDINARY WORLD WHEN YOU HAVE AN INTER-WORLD CHAT!? WHAT KIND OF IDIOCY!?
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I don't have a problem with writing overall it's nice a bit cliche here and there but which fanfic does not have one anyway? Story development is not really what i expected maybe the author is going for a more day-to-day kind of fanfic But one glaring issue i find is the Main Chacter Blake I don't know why the author introduced us to Blake gave him a tragic backstory only to see him make a comeback at the last moment only for everything to not matter because the story is about Jaune Yes You heard me right although there is a decent backstory to Blake he is nothing but a cardboard there to show boring he is in comparison it seems Jaune has been put in more work as a character we see him growing out of his childish naivete becoming stronger and actually facing his problems While Blake is in the background doing whatever i can't say i'm not disappointed in his development and i think i understand to a degree Author wanted MC to have a harem for some reason but interactions came out rather forced and abrupt For example Blake takes a sudden interest in this troubled school-girl and gets pushed away because of her trust issues you'd think he would give her some space and as an actual stranger mind his own business right? No.. He is like a chinese MC here fighting for the damsel in distress trying to get interested to participate in conversations with her why? Because he was interested As i have said too much focus on Jaune to less on Blake his part of the story has not been cultivated well or he himself has not been that he comes across as uninteresting forced and ingeniune in his intentions I don't see the point in making him the MC either way but it's not business Sadly i will be dropping this hopefully in the future Author learns from his mistakes and makes a better fanfic which we can all enjoy
Translated by Google sensei: All relatively good at first, but then it goes downhill in the Demon Slayer mission. The interaction between any character other than the protagonist or Jaune is good, but the main problem is with these two. Not only do I have to put up with the protagonist being in embarrassing and clichéd situations, but also, thanks to the author's fanboy, I have to put up with Jaune in even more embarrassing and clichéd situations. The author kills only both characters and the worst thing is that they are the ones who have the main role, not to mention that since this story is a semi-self-insertion, the protagonist lives sucking Jaune's p*nis. If you manage to ignore all that sorry spectacle, the story is decent, the author has to stop being such a fanboy and give these two characters more solid personalities.
I Dropped Reading This Novel, Because I Don't Like The Novel's Storyline with the Theme "Group Chat" and the members have MCs from other anime, actually the story is good but I found in this novel that the MC of this novel is not highlighted, in fact the one that stands out is the MC of RWBY and maybe the next one that stands out is Archer *disclaimer: This is just my own opinion so just ignore it
I honestly really like this story, even tho there is many loopholes but i know it was part of the future plots. So don't listen to those demeaning words from others that discouraging you to continue, they are just jealous that their books are ****ty. Especially GhostyZ, he is a famous scamming author. He can't keep his words, unstable update, begging for stones using chapter instead inside author note to increase word count, uninteresting plots, unlogical physics, MC lead by lust, no character development, short chapters. So don't worry about those people, just keep up the good work.
So I came from Fanfiction.net after seeing "picture of her" because this is a place that does have this function and that place doesn't. I really like the MC and he's unlike many other trashy edgy xianxia protagonist of this site. Also as soon as I remembered that you wrote Tadano and Delivery system I knew this would be good! As a Fellow Chat Group writer I know it's really difficult to manage many characters from different series because of character dynamics, power systems, scaling, etc. My only gripe with this ff is, why make OC's as the MC's heroines, when you can add many other beautiful, strong women from different series? I mean, it's your story, but honestly it's a waste of a fanfic IMO. BTW I'm Im4xsk1ll from FF.net, saying it just in case... Also, if it isn't any problem, can you review my fic? I'm thinking of rewriting the parts that I messed up and looking for different ideas to see what could I do to make it better....
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it's a good story, but too often do missions between dimensions even though he just finished it and this story becomes less focused in the original mc world, if you can place the story between the mission story and the story in the original mc world is 5:5 which will make the story balanced because many readers may be bored to see mc doing missions continuously and want to see mc development in the real world.... and also mc looks pretty naive as he seems to easily make a contract with steam for his game issue placing his distribution rights to steam... ah and also if possible when the story takes place in the original world mc should look more original / natural without any magical elements, also don't let mc do things that don't make sense like make games without making the company and steam company management not question how he can make the game itself without the help of the team/company which is very unreasonable... the author should make the story more realistic like if mc wants to make a game he has to make a company and so on.... like the novel "recarnation in America that will start to make company from scratch
