BloodyPen
OMG so here I go first this is a freakin unique story for me, at first I thought this would be a forbidden romance from the 1 chap but I guess it's not, and Omg it was kind funny from the chapter two. This sends ripples of emotions in my heart no kidding. Omg, YiYi my little ball of sunshine I am so in love with him and I am curious to know what will happen next in the story. And only chapters and this much progress Not bad! And it was easy for me to read too since the sentenses are kept simple yet very discriptive.
Doesn't this touch the borderline of forbidden love? It's a rather interesting take on the reincarnation of lovers. Although their circumstances are unfavourable and Xin Wenruo needs to provide necessities for Yiyi, as a reader, I'd like to feel more about Xin Wenruo's dilemma that her previous lover was reincarnated as her child. I'd like to see her mulling over and over her situation. For the reason that, isn't it because of her intense love for her lover that she's utterly devastated? It's like that feeling was gone in an instant. However, I do like your concept, very much so. I'd like to see Xin Wenruo and Yiyi's character developments and the evolution of their relationship as a whole. In terms of technical writing, there are minor mistakes in the grammar. As I've said, they're minor and could be easily proofread. It does not affect your plot whatsoever, but editing will make it a tad easier for other readers. I'm not saying this out of spite! They're merely constructive. :) You have a really great story here, and I hope that my review will encourage you to write more! I am looking forward to very cute Yiyi's growth!