taxi_pineapple
Read up to chapter 6 before this review and It's interesting. It was straight to the point, yet having some mysteries circling around it. I'm curious to know what led to the crux of her being labeled a murderer. Grammar need help, but we learn and improve as we write, so it's fine. It neither affect the flow of the story, nor disrupt the enjoyment of it. Looking forward to know how this will turn out. Best of luck, author!
So far, so good. The writing of the descriptions - or lack thereof, kind of tossed me out since I consider attention to details engage the mind to be more engrossed to the story. The pacing is good, but the short paragraphs and the lack of scenes in the chapters made the impression that this would be a short story. The text could use proofreading and some transitional devices as well. Overall, the concept is present as well as plot. My advice is only to add more to enhance reader engagement to the world you have constructed. Best of luck in your writing.
This story quite thrilling. The writing quality is good and the updates are stable. Some of the scenes are rushed and there are very few grammatical errors, but that's fine. I wish the chapters were a little longer and more details were added into the scene. Overall, this is a good book. Keep up the good work author.
There was some grammar issue. Some of the sentence used, I felt like could be reword differently. As for the flow of the story, I feel like it's a bit fast, especially the emotion written changes in an unrealistic way. I was confused on some part of the story becuase of the twist and turns. But I like the constant indication of love between both sister. As for the characters development, I think it can improve. Mainly, the male characters. Don't just say their handsome or tall maybe describe what made them attractive. In overall, the story have a good plot with real-life issue to which I like. The story might need a few tweak, but I like where this is going. Good luck!
This novel may be slightly stunted, but it has an eery grace to it. Even when the story progresses fast, it feels calm, while under the surface there is something quite disturbing. It's quite a surreal read, but I find myself savouring each chapter. This might sound odd given the tags, but if you enjoy the feeling of reading psychological horrors, you might enjoy reading this.
I have read ten chapters so far and this is my review: The writing quality is good, better than other authors here in this website. There are no misspelled terms or vocabularies. The stability of updates is an automatic five stars to me. Character design, it seems that the author has described the characters in a vivid manner to the point I could portray their looks and apparel. The descriptions of the world background is vivid as well. Overall, the story has an intriguing plot. It grabs the reader's attention therefore I will give this novel five stars!
From what I've read so far, the premise is pretty interesting. I haven't read many killer webnovels yet, but I can say that this has a very unique take on it. Although the prose might feel a little rushed at times, the author still manages to reign it back in, carrying the story forward. Though the grammar might be a bit off sometimes, it doesn't take away from the story nor the setting. Speaking of the setting, the locations in this story are...quite realistic, might I say, and it adds to the story. Overall, great work by the author and I wish to see more in the future.
The premise is interesting but the way the story is being told needs a little work. The chapters are a tad too short and only leave space for major developments and not enough room for other small elements to breathe. Also, some of the grammar, while never making it too hard to follow what's going on, can take you out of the flow of the plot. The Idea is really itself is really good thought, just needs a bit more work on how to tell said idea.