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Swatdude64
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There really is nothing special about this...MC has a card system, was in the dxd world for 16 yrs BUT didnt meet any of the cast cause of the plot...for some retarded, reason he rushes to save issei cause of a quest BUT he has no powers or anything.... MC dosnt seem intelligent, like this is a fan boy type MC,,,,he has no plans, it starts at cannon time, MC has no interesting traits other than his powers, the CD is minimum, like its not new author level new, its just not there. ie: characters just meet and talk and move on.. Also it seems that this author is a fan of rias, just read chp 3 [not fan fan, but sees her as a somewhat sad existence- something I see as retarded, cause rias is an idiot, not sad]... BUT it kinda seems like MC wont cuck issei so yah, but this is not certain so far BUT even if goes after rias still weird cause she still " slept " with issei...like I dont get why if she does this she dosnt do same for raiser and secretly kill him in his sleep, she has pride and a questionable self worth...she dosnt have to **** raiser, just use a poison to kill and no one will know or something like that, cause if she uses her body to get issei, why not do same to save her self or something,,,this is why she is retarded, to me ] .IDK, overall its not pazzaz?... Do what you will with this info.. GL to you author. **: actual rating is 2 stars,,,,reason I gave 3 is cause I dont really argue with someone saying I am being a cruel
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Welp first of all I don't like it, but to pay respect to the author effort for writing this piece of crap I forced my self to read till chap 24, the mc is person without any personality, the first quest was kinda bellow average but the second was sh*it, I kinda understand that the author didn't wanted to make him too op by fvcking up the rewards but the punishment is death, I mean wtf happened?? The second thing is the peerages, I don't mind the mc he knows wtf he is getting himself into. Its basically slavery. According to Wikipedia Slavery is any system in which principles of property law are applied to people, allowing individuals to own, buy and sell other individuals, as a de jure form of property.[1] A slave is unable to withdraw unilaterally from such an arrangement and works without remuneration. Many scholars now use the term chattel slavery to refer to this specific sense of legalised, de jure slavery. In a broader sense, however, the word slavery may also refer to any situation in which an individual is de facto forced to work against their own will. Scholars also use the more generic terms such as unfree labour or forced labour to refer to such situations.[2] However, and especially under slavery in broader senses of the word, slaves may have some rights and protections according to laws or customs. โ So it's clear that dxd peerage allows people to : own people sell/buy people "a slave is unable to withdraw"(strays are killed) BUT this is a devil story so its kinda average to see a devil trick someone, its in their blood, BUT trowing yourself to the shit is an action that even a 5 years old would know is bad. The third reason and the most hateful one is the mc is forced to help issei by a quest witch is kinda fvck up in the two directions, first the mc's host is the mc not issei so its kinda dumb to see a tool helps another person against its master, second issei is a person that you can't even like, the guy, literally is a pervert with a god tier luck, so yeah everybody hates him,for real I wouldn't doubt if in the end of the story come out to be a manipulative motherfucka. That will be more interesting that the real canon when he let Asia dies, the best part of the actual story that his kids hate him for be coward and his fvck up obsession with bo*bs.
Mc is sonas slave and preaches the art of simping :(๐ณ๐คฏ๐คซ๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ด๐ฎ๐ต
It was quite the interesting read, even if it was flawed, until it hit a certain chapter and it turned ****. I have no doubt the author is not going to change anything, and I respect him for his dedication in writing, but honestly this novel is not for me. It turned into a real mess with no direction, no synergy real quick. You have no idea what the f is going on at that point, and our MC's family situation turns real f ed up quick. The author's sense of writing takes a nosedive, or maybe it was like that in the first place, and the novel just turns into a hentai/**** plot lmao. Suddenly his power isnt the card power, its just some incubus esque women fucking power that attracts 6 or 7 females for him in a week lul. And his mother is a huge super duper mega hoe* btw, and she aint afraid to flaunt it like a badge of honor it seems. Anyway, until that chapter it was actually going alright, but my brain cannot read past that atrocity. One final thing, his future daughters who inherit his bloodline are also gonna be mega whores too, with potentially the number of males in the whole universe as their body count
The people who give bad reviews are usually the ones who want the mc just to have sex everyone. Just cause the mc can get a girlfriend and doesn't only use her as a sexual outlet. And treat her as someone with feelings. The story is good. I enjoy it. A new type of dxd fanfics where the MC doesn't just becomes over powered, get the girl and has sex.
Here i am against And this is still a masterpiece The work of godly hands , the ideas from a godly mind . . . And please ignore the haters , they are everywhere this type of people are mainly losers trying to make anything hard for others . Those who call Evil Pieces system slavery They should know that they are bashing devils For angels have the same system called Brave Saints baded on card game instead of chess And you know the if an angel got a tiny though of doing a sin{Slavery included} they would fall forget about cometting the deal , you would have Michael the leader of Heaven faction to be the first to fall , since he was the one the made the thing to recover their own race {Angels} from extinction like Devils Do . Fallens cannot be made like that it is either by natural birth between two pure fallens , or an angel to fall from heavens so they already have two ways to increase their own people {Most of angels have fallen from lust}
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cuando comencรฉ a leer este fanfic pensรฉ que encontrarรญa algo bueno, y los primeros capรญtulos me demostraron que estaba en lo correcto, pero el autor forzรณ una tonterรญa con los padres del mc, ya no tenรญa sentido su sistema de cards, se reducรญa a su "hernecia de rey de la jungla" para que las mujeres le abrieran las piernas, *suspiro* pero estuvo aceptable, ya que esto es un fanfic y es la historia del autor, pero lo que si me disgustรณ fue que que su madre sea una puta en celo que se enorgullecรญa cuando contaba como en su juventud se acostaba con cualquier tipo, incluso que llegรณ a tener un hijo en otro lado, eso fue lo peor de esto no mentirรฉ que fue algo novedoso este sistema de cards, pero por forzar una herencia estรบpida hace que la madre sea una youkai deseosa de sexo por todo, dejo de leer esto
