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Comments of chapter undefined of Great Company

QINTHIL
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thank you for the advice

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BrianGallacher7
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Needs an editor to be understood clearly Most of first chapter isn't needed, gives what seems to be pointless background history on character. Why not start by saying he loves in alternate universe/ planet that is similar to earth but more advanced. Simpler clearer and slot less unneeded information

iiloveme
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First comment 😁✌🏻️