vinayraj
Revised review of the author:- - Some grammatical mistakes here and there in the initial chapters; however, as long as you don't mind those mistake, I will guarantee regarding the story. - It's going to be a long book. So, be prepared for it. - No harem - Many elemental spirits and spirit beasts - New worlds - Overpowered mc with hidden powerful enemies. Hmm...that's it. I hope you enjoy reading it. If you have any more doubts, you can ask me below this reply. Thanks for reading my books.
The concept is good. The story is simple and straightforward almost like a children’s fairytale. Now for the not so good bit: The MC has the IQ of a doorknob and constantly whines besides getting everything anyone could ever wish for in the given setting. This bit gets repetitive and way too annoying. Most of the MC’s vocabulary consists of the phrase “huh?!”. The fights are ridiculous. A dozen apprentice level kids holding off a demon army while most of them are in a one on one situation while the mc ponders over moves and goes “huh?!” every time he sees anthing move. The grammar is atrocious. This needs an editor.
Some of the chapters are hard to read.. Just a little bit better than machine translations.. Well I dont mind the author asking the readers for grammatical help, but If you want to win that spirity award or what the hell that award is. You need a proofreader and editor.. This Novel is good.. I'll just come back when everything is fixed.. Work harder Author-san.. If someone wants to know what I feel as I read through the chapters.. Listen to DUALITY.. Sigh* I would've loved this novel right now, but-Sigh*
I really tried to enjoy this story but after 50 chapters I can confidently say it's not worth your time. The grammar is not great but I've read enough web novels to be numb to it at this point. The system messages are overly repetitive, and constantly bombard you with 'ding'. The MC is genuinely the dumbest I've ever read. He is incredibly 'lucky' and his plot armor is so thick it would be more accurate to call it a plot nuclear bunker. The author introduces a McGuffin only to resolve it half a chapter later. In one case the system gives a quest to tame a lightening spirit hawk, immediately after an injured lightening spirit hawk lands directly at his feet. This sort of 'plot' development happens every chapter. When I was 5 years old I wrote a story for my grandma about a worm called Steve who was an army soldier. It had more character development than this novel.
This novel started off really well, even the world and character building is pretty good. After he went to the five element world the second time, this novel's down fall started. The amount fillers is insane, it put even MGA to shame. This is the first novel I have read where the MC is still stuck in the impoverished starting place even at chapter 600. MC faces no setbacks for his idiotic decisions. I think his life spirit should have died when it got kidnapped to sparrows village. Certain places the MC should be there and not in training like during the mercenary guild meeting all the powers. Author needs to improve his creativity. Currently this novel is mediocre at best and will frustrate you most of the time. Only time will tell if it gets back to its best.
This is an amazing story that has thoroughly impressed me so far. Normally system novels or hit or miss to me, especially the ones where the system can control the main character through missions. But this one so far at least seems to have a reason for giving the missions that it has, and that the missions actually serve a purpose. We'll have to find out about that late if it is true. Looking forward to see how the story progress.
in chapter 116 the mc says that he doesn't want to interfere with other people's affairs' but literally buys a slave and frees it because he feels bad, but when an entire tribe of "people" is in danger he says that he doesn't "WAnT To InTerFER iN OtHeR PeOplES AffAirs". There is so much inconsistency's with this novel. After chapter 70 he always blames his system for every little thing that doesn't goes his way, and it's like reading a spoiled brat that is op, and is expecting everything to fall into place
The grammar has drastically improved from before, but it definitely needs more refining. I'd suggest getting an editor to further refine the novel and increase immersion. Additionally, for personal improvement, try using grammar editing apps such as Grammarly. Buying Grammarly premium will definitely further refine your writing and maybe teach you some more grammar. That aside, the novel is highly interesting and engaging. I'd suggest having the MC improve his battle power, but that's about it.