Hi guys I’m 12 and this is my second story I am going to write and I'd appreciate if you could tell me in the comments how to improve my writing Mike is a writer for a novel (just like me) but unfortunately dies (unlike me) and is transmigrated to the body of 4 year old Liam Von Estram 9th prince of the Estramite empire but is despised by all and is considered trash and is also a cannon fodder character from mike’s novel
Mike was at home on his desk writing the 627th chapter of his novel and he then publishes his work and goes out for a stroll.
Since Mike has a very famous novel many people fund him on dascord and many other sites so Mike is on his way to the bank to withdraw some money and when he is about to cross the road a truck comes out of practically nowhere and is about to hit Mike and then 'Splat'
While it would be ironic for Mike to get hit by truck-kun and die he actually stepped backwards, tripped and got impaled by a spike in the fence behind him slowly bleeding to death.
When mike opened his eyes and suddenly screams this is because of the sudden stream of information into his mind which is more information than he can handle this information is actually the past 2 years of memories of Liam Von Estram but these memories are actually all the information he knows through listening because he is blind.
When Liam(Mike) opens his eyes he could not see but in a way sense everything around him in 10 meters and once he registered that the old Liam was beaten to death by the Emperor of the Estramite Empire before he was sent to look after the Vermillion city and near Vermillion city is the phoenix forest which was filled with spirit beasts and Elves.
The only reason Liam was given this land was because the Empress Dowger thought Liam looked cute so favored him slightly. The reason Emperor Uraden Von Estram did not like Liam was because he was the son of his personal maid whom others saw as just a lowly peasant.
When Liam tried to move he was asulted by a sharp pain around his body when suddenly a blue clear screen with black writing stated:
<Congratulations on obtaining the summoning system>
Liam was slightly surprised but when he thought about all those novels and mangas he read he stated in his mind 'Status, Inventory Quests and summon' and the 4 clear blue screens once again appeared and one had 10x10 small boxes on one screen and on another there was a white box where you put a ticket while the last stated;
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Name: Liam Von Estram (Mike)
Age: 3
Summons: 0
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and much other miscellaneous information while when Liam was about to read the last one all the screens dissappeared and two new ones popped up with writing on it saying
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Congratulations on completing quest: learning how to operate the System on your own
reward: Optimum health rejuvenation/ gold summoning ticket/ Amethyst summoning ticket/ 100 exp
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and the other one read
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Congratulations for completing Quest: figure out all of system features
reward: 2 x Gold summoning tickets/ Psuedo-Magi summoning ticket/ spirit pill and yin, yang pill
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Liam once reading this was ecstatic but suddenly the carriage stopped and Liam heard a voice saying "Lord Liam we have arrived"