Comments of chapter undefined of Machine God of the Multiverse
Machine God of the Multiverse
GrimHunterV
Chapter comments34
now that changed things. you put relation point, alliance faction and character's mental conditions. this smells gamer world, not physical ones. he literally can alter a person mind (virus, manipulate; stay loyal) with those who had 100 reputation points with him. and he can pick allies then backstab them later on without backlash because he has >25 reputation point with them. he just shot megatron 3 times, and megatron didn't even hate him and let him kill other decepticon (but i guess, megatron didn't see mc heavily injured megatron's kind). i think you (author) need to rework your novel, be more structural and give different pov (i.e autobot, deception, canon characters) when there is an important need to see their perspective. don't just ups and go without any clear or visible clues, better yet explanation about his source power and other important plot. i know it's not canon anymore (as you stated), but still, you used it as backstory. so, there is still some importance role for them, not just tools just for sake of being there so mc has story to tell. they are characters to build your story, hope you won't ignore them more. also, kinda need to fix your grammar mate. i won't put my comment into review section as to effect your stars review. tbh i would probably vote low-mid star for it if i were to put it there. i have no intent to be offensive and hopefully you can take my comment as my intention to voicing my review about your story. if your offended, well, worse you can delete it perhaps.
