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Yet another shameless author review. They seem to be everywhere these days don't they? Anyways I'll be frank with you. If you have any lengthy questions, comments, concerns go ahead and put them here and I will respond to you probably within a few hours. If its a question which would be a spoiler I'll purposefully be vague when answering to avoid spoiling the storyline. But that's a given. Also when this writing prompt ends I will continue the story line till the bitter end even if it doesn't win because Its one I've wanted to do for awhile anyways and the writing prompt was just conveniently ended up starting the day I started this.
One of the few novels I've given an honest 5/5. This author knows how to engrave images in your mind to the point you feel what is going on, whether it's someone dying or a plant struggling to walk. It feels so darn real. It's no wonder that this work got popular so quickly. I can see this become the next "That time I got reincarnated as a slime". I have no doubts!
Well, that's definitely a great story. The MC is quite interesting, and so is his situation. The writing quality is good, and it's fitting of a writer. You're easily taken inside the story, without the grammar errors which usually kill the ambiance. I'm fan of the story, and I hope it'll last. So I recommend for you to read it, because even if the description of the story doesn't attract to you, the story is another thing.
Writing quality:good quality(from Asian my English is [Writing:lvl7/20] [Speaking:lvl7/20] [Reading:lvl15/20] Yup my writing and speaking is basic(mediocre) Stability of updated:good(just don't rush the story) Story development:the story is good so far as I don't feel that it's not rushed like the others(well if have time skips) Character design: balanced build he should consider evolving 3 times from being weak World building:so far so good just don't focused to much on the mc just balanced the interaction with the surrounding of the the mc
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I've finally finished what chapters there are! I never thought I'd be reading a story about a moving rose fighting bugs, but here we are. Writing quality in the beginning is already good, but somehow the author improves in just a short span of time. At first I was having difficulty with the pacing as the first few chapters didn't have the kind of comma and line break input that made reading comfortable for me, but by chapters 10+ they were well formatted and spaced out. Stability in updating is nothing to scoff at. 2-3 chapters a day? I wish I could do that. At present the story development revolves around surviving and abiding by the system's rules. Of course, it's still early on into the story so we can't comment much on that yet. But! I find the character to be promising. You have mentions of him being a coward and running away from things. I'm excited to see how his development goes. World background is so far stable and is being slowly introduced (the exerpts for the manuals are interesting. reminds me a bit of a sci-fi book ive read with a similar format). There isn't really a problem except for the naming which kind of seemed off. Lora and Xander? Sounds like great fantasy names! Joe? 10/10 why not. But if it's a fantasy setting and there are people named Jake and Rick, meh. That's my only criticism. Overall, it's a wonderful story and needs some more faced paced action. Good luck to the author and I hope you continue to have fun writing!!
I love stories about monster evolution and this one, is one of the better stories Iβve read in awhile (that is under 100chs) Grammar - 10/10 Writing style - Fluent/easy to read Story/plot - to early to tell but has a good foundation to build a great story. System - simple to follow if not a little lack luster in details on skills/mutations/stats I.e dmg inc. and hp inc. etc. Overall recommendation - Dig in your roots, cause itβs gonna be a fun ride.
Reading the first 5 chapters, it reminds me heavily of 'That Time I was Reincarnated as a Slime'. It gives off that kind of feel in terms of plot. The MC has a bit more personality though and is very snarky. Since he can't talk, you fully see how his mind works, and I do like those bits that give him more of a face than the generic protagonist. One bit of criticism - the progression of his abilities as he consumes bigger and stronger beings like Katamari Damacy does start getting repetitive after a few chapters of similar things but with different beings. It might be wise to shake things up soon by having our little friend go on a journey and explore the world a bit. Reading only about him surviving and figuring out his skills soon gets old, so you may want to show us more about this interesting world that you are trying to create, not just what is in the immediate view of the protagonist. Other than that, keep an eye on your sentence structure. Your sentences need 3x times as many commas as what you've been using. But it's not so bad that it detracts from ease of reading.