JustPassing123
The story has potential. I personally have never read anything with a similar setting so I find it fresh. The writing quality needs some work but as the author is new and doesn't seem to have much experience that is to be expected. I would encourage readers to look past the grammatical errors and read the story without a critical mindset.
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