When I first started reading this, I got hooked straight away, but now that I'm at chapter ten. I'm starting to realise some things. Some things in this are extremely unrealistic, to the point where it seems they were added in for the hell of it.
I also find myself getting confused frequently. I have to re-read a lot of the chapters because I feel like I've missed something, or I'm not sure as to what's going on. The characters confuse me as well, because I read the first couple of chapters not really understanding who was who. But that might just be me.
The writing is good, but there is definitely room for improvement..
The story is very very slow paced, and I haven't even seen the main character yet. That's fine, but it's difficult to keep hooked as I read more.