Nick_Alderson
Correct me if I'm wrong... Morihara = Dad Fuku = Mom Maasatsu = Eldest (son) Tadakatsu = Second (son(MC)) Rin = Youngest (the girl with him from the field?) P.S.. i hope instead of interchanging nii-chan and tadakatsu you can just use nii-chan instead since it's more appropriate..... (or did you just use 'tadakatsu' in first chapter to introduce his name perhaps?)
Overall, the writing is weak. Yet I couldn't person to judge an author base on what he writes. Just expressing my thoughts. I think the dialogue is a bit modern than I expected. I read so many historical novels, that I'd know how the characters often spoke in slangish voices. The characters seemed stereotypical too.