Some grammatical and syntax issues, and in some places hard to understand, but overall a great book. If it was finished, that would be awesome but she hasn’t uploaded in almost a year, so don’t expect anything, enjoy it for what it is, and be prepared to not know the ending. The beginning was a little too slow, almost 80ish chapters devoted to like, one day in the book, which is excessive. It picks up as far as time frame as it goes on. It’s hard to know who the “main” character is as it gets side tracked by another two characters stories, that, while essential to the plot, vie for the position of lead. Physical descriptions could use a little work, with things like color, size, texture and just appearance over all. For an armature writer, she’s pretty good, and for her well edited chapters, great. Tbh, if she worked on some of the stuff above mentioned, she could get this published by a real book company- the story is great so far. I’d love to see how it ends, so I hope she finishes it soon. With an ending, and better editing, 9/10. The way it stands now, 7/10. Either way, better than half the stuff in here. Good job author. ✌️
