This story has some great moments but unfortunately it’s overshadowed by fast pace, a lack of detail, and some bad dialogue. I feel it needs to be seriously refined. It has too much of the stereotypical Revenge betrayal CEO lover story that you read about all the time. What is really the big problem with this is it doesn’t take it anywhere new. Another thing the characters go on about how in love they are and how the MC would love the ML even if he was poor but my problem is they haven’t had any time to build on this relationship at all it’s just BAM 💥 instant love. And they’re both such Mary Sue’s it’s ridiculous And gives no anxiety to the plot.
