The writing or English starts to get better at chapter 18. So, just hold on a bit. Then at chapter 33 or 34 he has started to has for help finding and editor. Then at about chapter 36 the editor starts editing and it is much better.
My god, the editor needs to be fired immediately. There’s Terri or grammar missing words several periods missing at least 2 missing comma’s. Is this supposed to be a joke? Also they missed a question mark after asking a question... they put a period instead.
I think that youre trying too hard and is confusing yourself with all the information in here, the chapter is a mess thanks to that. ^^"
Thank you for the chapter and the treat! (^_^)/
this novel is good. a small grammatical error is okay, but the narrator jumping from 1st to 3rd perspective is breaking my immersion, hope this gets fix in the following chaps.