Paper_Crane
Yes, author here, a shameless one at that. Please don't mind me. Just passing by. Yes, I'm an utter fool. Tales of Three Realms should be published by the Fifth of February. Quality of the book? Good if not better, BL story, a lot is a lot, the characters might be relatable. The author herself? The worst kind, confused 24/7, whatever.
The story, the parts I've read, is very interesting. The progress between characters have a slightly unbalanced pace. Though, there are parts where I can't seem to understand what exactly is happening because of grammar issues. I'll power through to finish this but so far, I'm not quite into it yet.
With only eight chapters I don't think I can give a proper review but I'll write on what I can. Character design was done well, the two characters Yue Ji and ChenChen are pretty fleshed out, no problems there. World background...There is a little vagueness in the terms of the Mortal Realm..Sure, readers can know that it's set in the modern day, supposedly China since the characters' names are such. Story Development..so far it's pretty easy to follow and it makes for an interesting read if one likes these kinds of stories with gods. Writing quality is not bad. Continue writing!
So far world building has been immersive. Demons, God's,and Ghost are similar with distinct differences. The MC is still being fleshed out and his mentor is still demonstrating knowledge. I look forward to seeing how this developes in the future! Please continue the story and may we all gain happiness from it.
I was already sold after the preview😂 Love how deep and detailed the story is! The amount of depth worked into the plot is already smoothly rolled over your head adter only a few chapters. The grammar is really good! It really strengthens the detailed plot, characters, and world. Splendid. Character's are really refreshing. Hope to see some more development later in the story! Keep it up! :)
Hooray! Chinese BL story! Always so cute and fluffy BL! Although I haven't read the original version, just based on the first three chapters, it shows a lot of interesting parts. For example, the interactions between the duo are so cute and witty. I'm looking forward to the author continuing back to the where the previous work left off and fly beyond that like a "paper crane". Time to check the older work~>3</
Chapter One: Your A/N said there was too much “was” and “were,” but those words are necessary for proper setences. For example, “What he realized first (was) that he was falling.” and “Often, human whose body wasn't strong enough (was) harmed or worse, died.” Although with the latter, it would sound better if it was restructured plurally, “Often, humans with bodies that weren’t strong enough were harmed, or worse, died.” But in general, your grammar is good. Yuan Ji and YueChen’s meeting and dialogue was entertaining. I also became curious why Yuan Ji got banished, and why YueChen is a ghost. Chapter Two & Three: Yuan Ji and YueChen bounce off one another really well. They both different, and their interactions and thoughts are amusing. The story Yuan Ji told was interesting, but maybe because it’s still early into the story, I’m wondering where the story is leading to. The synopsis didn’t give much of an idea either. Anyway, although it was short, I enjoyed this! You write well, and the characters are good. I look forward to seeing how everything plays out in future chapters.