Reviews of Taking on the Magical World

The novel looks good But I have an important question? One of the most hated things in Harry 's original Is not marrying Hermione That's why I hated Ron desperately So I do not know how I watched and completed the movies The question is, is there a harem or not?

Started with an interesting premise, but it's a bit too Gary stue. Everything seems to fall in Mcs lap, his training is glossed over, and of course he invented new potions at the age of 4? While I appreciate the authors intent it all adds up to be too much.

A very good story! 5/5 one of the best HP fanfics out there. If you are a potential reader, just go ahead and read the story, you won't regret it in the slightest. Now this part's for the author: For things that could be improved, the first and most important thing I would suggest you do is using Grammarly. It's a completely free software that works on all platforms and will fix up almost all of the numerous minor grammatical mistakes that you make (immersion is slightly ruined every time one of those mistakes pop up). Other than that, I think the MC's mindset is a little off... he doesn't at all behave like someone who is mentally 30 years old. While this could be because his brain is still that of a kid's, I'd still suggest toning down his childishness a little bit to make his character a little more realistic given his circumstances. I mean come on, no grown ***** would EVER use an example of "having a beauty but not being able to touch her" to their own mother. Even kids wouldn't. That's major immersion-breaking levels of bad dialogue mate... It didn't fit into the context at all. And that's just one example of many such occurrences of bad dialogue choice. I would suggest going over dialogue lines even more thoroughly than you do now. It's always good to think "If I was him/her would I say that line to someone who has that relation to me in this situation?". So basically, to summarize, your weak-points are "Grammar", "Realistic Personalities", and "Dialogue Choice" in my opinion. If you work on those then your story will be even better by leaps and bounds, because you already have the style, world building, pacing, flow, formatting, plot, and all the other stuff in the bag! So keep up the excellent work you are doing and I hope you have an awesome day!! :)

A little disappointed harry potter and cultivation.............................. .......other higher realms do not blend together very well..........

Bad grammar, forced story, no ‘character’. It’s annoying to read, characters speak bluntly, very boring. Immature. ................,.,,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,l,.,.,,,,.,.,.,,.,.,.,.,.,,.,.,.,

Good start Good background But slow story development ............ . Wait .... ........... ....... ........

Honestly this story starts off amazing and quite original even with the grammer issues but it sharply falls off around chapter 65 ish with the whole dumbledore, it seems as though the author just doesnt know what comes next and you can tell because the next 30 chapters the plot suffers compared to the orginial first 30-40 chapters. All in all an ok read up til chapter 60 ish then you can stop tbh.

Excellent fanfiction, nothing else to say .........................................................................................................................................................................................

It’s a good story, the characters logic is a bit strange but over all it’s a pretty good story! Keep up the good work author! Well I have to have 140 signs or letters....

At first glance this story seems to be a decent and potentially interesting combination of harry potter and some small xianxia features such as a form of cultivation levels, not literal but figurative. Still seems cool. Then unfortunately the story sadly follows the pagj of copy pasta. The character is supposed to be starting school early and is one year older than harry potter. This sets a neat idea, sadly again there begins the coppasta. It becomes a copy of sorcerors stone. Lines after lines of dialogue and descriptions directly lifted out of the first hp book. This a good fanfiction doth not make. I recommend going back and rewritting the story from thebeginning the character and his mother and family really do need more interaction and relational dialogue. Not enough detail and the characters seem a bit shallow personality wise.

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The mc's mother is so annoying "if I tell you, you will be in danger" what is the fu** with her, she is talking like the people who are targeting her will know about their conversation And what with this stupid mc 😑😑😑😑 So disappointing😑😑😑😒

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The book starts off which a great premise, but then starts going off the rails when a ten year old starts yelling, insulting, blackmailing, and generally being a dick. And no one around seems to do anything about it. It boggles my mind seeing as to everyone else he should have no major background.

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