It's hard to read, with a lot of errors. It feels more like a stream of consciousness, without breaks than a story.
He talks with an obviously 'cute' system in his head - in reality, a completely unnecessary entity, made to be cute, but is instead cringe-worthy. Their interactions are chaotic, aren't moving a story, which pretty much annoys me.
It's a pity - I would really love to read a story set in TDG, about breaking seals created by assholes gods. Sadly, instead of focusing on the story, the author writes nonsensical banter with a 'cute' system, trying to be cool. It goes for paragraphs...
