Reviews of deleted story

Hello again, It's been three months seen I checked my book here or upload any new chapter. I took time to re-write the whole book and end up with a better version of it with a new title. I know that many people lost hope for this story to be a good one but I tried my best to do it better this time. But, I decided to publish the whole book on another site for a chance for critical reviews, I know it's weird to promote the book from another site but I wanted to tell everyone who read it here that the final better version is now available at Swoon Reads. https://***.swoonreads.com/m/the-infinite-spirits-series-bennu-effect/ Again thanks for everyone who put time for my story. xx

Hello Everyone, The book is currently on hiatus, I'm feeling stuck and having a terrible writer block, I hope more people read the book and truly give an honest review because I wanted to continue writing this one but I feel uninspired. Anyways thanks for everyone who read the book till the latest chapter and thanks for new readers. xx

Something new to read, a bit refreshing to the mind. Plot and writing is good. I'm liking this story so far. Keep it up author! 🙌 (Review Trade)

At first I was kind of a bit at lost but once I started to get the hang of it, it made me really interested. It's a rare for me to read this kind of genre so I tend to a bit picky but from what I've read it seems like this story will not disappoint.

This story is wonderful!! First I thought maybe it was like the rest of the novels. Loving this novel so far. It's not your typical novel that immediately gives you all the answers and the background. Bit by bit, you get to find out what happens and tie it to previous chapters and realize that there's a lot more to the plot.

An honest review. It feels like I'm reading a diary more than a novel.The sequence of the events, although specific dates and time were stated, seemed to be messed up and not really that connected. It's a fast pace and yet when it's flashbacks/time earlier, it doesn't seemed connected to the present one. Not all readers will go back to the specific dates and time written above after reading many paragraphs and conversations.I suggest, before ending the flashbacks/time earlier, you connect it to the present time. It's too confusing for the readers when it's not connected and not sequenced properly. The grammar is good. You just have to sequence the events properly and connect it from present to past and from past back to present, if you know what I mean.The plot story is good. So I gave you 3 stars.

Found this by coincidence while author recommended reading my story. GREAT WRITING STYLE, grammar lapses nearly none and word construction is excellent. As a reader/writer of female MCs, I vote for this book for everyone. Cool that author has already planned a couple of chaps. Looking forward to this. Keeping this to my library. :)

The book had an well-written plot, and there are some correction needed when it comes to the grammar. Other than that, the novel is quite interesting.

Interesting. I think the part that I enjoy the most is the human interaction. They feel very life like when they communicate, and it makes me feel like I'm part of the conversation as well. The scenes are descriptive and gives the readers a sense of the world building that is currently happening. Though it is slightly confusing at times, it does not detract from the enjoyment of reading the story. All in all, looking forward to see where this is going! Keep up the good work! (๑˃ᴗ˂)ﻭ

This was a great read. Although it needs alot of editing. But overall, I loved it, The length of the capters were alright, and there was alot of dialogue in it, which must books frankly don't have.

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The story is developing at its own pace. You need to be patient. It's just 11 chapters. There are a lot of dialogues, which is good. But I feel there should be a little more description. Overall keep up the good work!

It needs some editing, but it's not unreadable. I'm a bit of a grammar nazi so I tend to notice the mistakes amidst the otherwise good writing (e.g: 'her phone ranged' instead of 'her phone rang'). The story, however, is good enough for me to ignore them. The story's just barely starting, though, and it is too early for me to make any comments about the plot. At the speed the story is going, I'd say I'm gonna need a couple more chapters or maybe a dozen more. //laughs// Anyways, I'd suggest you do some brushing up on the earlier chapters. Keep up the good work!

Awesome read, sister!! Had a lot of fun reading it? Its a bit hard to determine where it could go to but will there be adventures or more of Egyptian history mythology?? I especially like those kind of novels!! Anyway, GJ

Reading the book at few chapters made my head spin maybe due to excessive work and my brain wanted to sleep but my eyes are wide awake and added by the flashbacks plots of the story that my brain doesn’t cooperating to absurd information but i continued reading cause i found it interesting not noticing its the last chapter.... update more author.

I though this story development seemed slow.. it's okay since not everyone writes the same.. I was somewhat expecting more though. It's not my style but its good.. writing is good. Keep up the good work writer.

It's interesting. The concept is nee I guess to me. At first, I was a bit confused with all the dreams and flashbacks, but then I got what they were saying. Overall it's pretty good. Update more (^o^)

Interesting... VERY well written. Deep characters, gets me wanting to know what happens next, and then... sadly no more chapters yet :( high rating for this! Looking forward to more!

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*remember, this review is based on the first five chapters* Objective complements: I saw no errors, in the little bit I saw the characters felt well-defined. Constructive criticism: some would say it is to be expected, but I know what seems like absolutely nothing about the world yet. it is best to have some, even if it's very small, explanation of how the world works within the first few chapters. Multiple points of view Early in a story commonly kills the story, as it stands so far you're not an exception to this, one would likely have to be willing to read further in to possibly latch onto this story. I would suggest starting out for the first eight or so chapters with just one point of view, then only adding one extra point of you that you will use every three to five chapters until you have all the points of you you want. Personal preference: either this is not an isekai or it is not showing to be an isekai as of yet, and has not for any other reason drawing my interest, so I will not be continuing to read this story. Rating: SD 3/5 WB 4/5 Rest 5/5