Story was okay at first, then it went weird at some parts as it seems too forced. But, this story went full retard and trash at chapter 42. Author seemed to run out of ideas and just randomly came up with some garbage which his general audience typically finds disturbing.
don't worry guys ill never abandon this, if you guys support me with comment and stuffs, ill always update, except my laptop and phone broken. one thing I have to say I don't really know how to write romance, I myself doesn't have girl friend, so yahoo!! (low voice)
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Great story, OP mc with harem likey, but now he have family to protect i guess he cant go on adventures and cause trouble haha...keep the chapters coming
Cmon bro please continue this novel. Please dont abandon this good novel. I wait for next chapter, please fast update next chapter. Im really like your story bro, cmon bro fast release next chapter, this story have huge potential if you can make a fast release i believe this novel will make top ranking original novel. Dont waste your potential bro keep continue this novel i believe in you bro.
Story was good but what with the rapist rival. It wasn't needed it. That ruin for me 😔😒😒😒😒😂😒😔😂😂😂😒😂😂😔😔😔..........,....................,..........
" I m not going to allow my 1st wife to do those kinds of dangers missions, only thing you need to do is the taking care our kids " What a sad story, it's just a checklist of the author wishes, a particularly disgusting one at that, move along
Mc is a beta male who is pushed into stuff like being Manipulated by females constantly idiot mc, ntr rape and so on Mc is supposed a op but is **** and easy to beat super op Collins even though he’s in a dram world
Hinata's sister, Hanabi Hyūga in Harem, a little used character in the anime, and puts Temari also, one of the best female characters, just a tip, story is good, congratulations and good luck!
This has been very intriguing as it has the main character pretty much doing his own thing and not just following along with the original MC's. The only problem I've seen is most of the personalities of the side characters like his wives in particular, tend to just have a blanket personality. If they didn't say their names would have no idea who was who. Also seems to do this with any villain's giving them the standard d@#k-bag personality. This seems to be an ongoing problem in any fan-fiction being able to capture side characters personality when they only show up in the original fiction with these traits, But giving them more screen time an author should evolve their personality inline with their own novel. (BREAK THE MOLD!!!) Other wise worth the read and support; an instant add to the library.
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It is a work of art Childhood dreams but for *****s Update stability is perfect The grammar is "meh" almost bad The sentences are a bit clumsy The OP things is super cool The story development is a bit forced but still a good fan-fiction Keep up with the good work!
Hello good sir I would like to have a suggestion that I think would be cool well two to be exact. I think Simon should have the ability to get all elemental chakra affinities and sage modes(including one where all are put together) and the ability to create a system (not up and would require him to have the strength) at first it would be just a status but as he gains power he can upgrade it and give it to other people (he can create as many as he wants) mainly towards the end of the story which could give a good opportunity for a second novel with a different character with ability’s from ‘god’ and a system from current mc
hello mister writer I really like your fanfic as far as I'm going reading I have a doubt . Simon will be more than 300 years old or could he become an immortal? you can also stay young with your wives, I hope an answer, thank you very much for writing this novel do not let it fall
This is the best harem novel i read so far. Advice from me to author is to detail the *** scene and it will make this novel better. And make this novel have action,***, and a little bit of comedy will make this novel perfect. Ohh and if author can make a fast update i believe this novel will become the best harem novel.