Reviews of I'm Sick of This World, Let's Move to Another!

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**NOT A REVIEW** This novel has not been updated in the past 6 months... I will now remove it from my library... Feel free to reply to any of my comments after you post a new chapter to get it back into my library.;,;.

This is a lovely and promising original novel . My rant shall begin shortly. I wonder why my review must be at the minimum of 140 characters though? If a novel had 140 characters it would be a clusterf**k of dailouge and would be horrific to read. Thus ends my rant.

*Remember, this review is based on the first five chapters* Constructive Criticism: I feel that this story was really well done, so the only constructive criticism I could come up with is something that I feel is a small detail, but still something that stuck out to me. In the first chapter, the paragraph: "This may have taken a while to explain, but it only took a matchstick's worth of time for Jun Long's lean body to completely vanish from the face of the Earth." feels like it was a bit redundant... I feel most people would assume that it took that amount of time anyway, so saying such is unneeded... Now since that relies on assumption, I'm not saying remove it, I'm just saying take a look yourself to see if you really feel that you need it or not.;,;. Positive Feedback: I found no real issues in your writing quality (the aforementioned thing is not an issue, just something I noticed and wished to comment on). You did well on your plot concept and execution, as well as, you designed and kept to the character designs well. Also, you did a good job at doing the necessary world background thus far.;,;. Personal Feedback: I enjoyed what I have read of this novel so far, I will continue reading it in time... Please keep up the good work.;,;.

I've only read until chapter 9 so this is by no means a full review and is subject to change. I've mainly put the review stars in the center to reflect that until more further details are fleshed out in the later chapters. Overall the writing isn't bad. I just wish the world description was fleshed out more. The only thing we know it that is a new world with barely any description of the place he is at or the land he is in. I feel like there isn't enough basic info. However that may change in the later chapters. The MC seems to be handling his random world jump pretty well. What of his family? Any basic past attachments? I feel he is a bit to nonchalant about it. Seems a bit emotionless even with his first encounters with the exception of when he meets women. If I had to rate on a scale of 1 to 10 I would give the start a 6/10. I have hopes though of this getting better. The writing is solid with little to no real editing issues. Overall just needs a bit more early world building and MC fleshing out before getting to far into the story. Can't build a house without a strong foundation.