Comments of chapter undefined of Divine Emperor of Death

If I were the bald man I'd laugh my ass off too.

Fuck me sideways and call me a uber

hahahahah it was his daughter :´)

hahaha what a good start

Seriously your prologue is a real mess. Almost dropped it immediately because of it. An since you want constructive critism: A prologue is there to ease the reader into the story not run him over with a combination of a infodump and a lot happening at the same time. If you really want to explain everything in the first chapter a good way to go about this is to start with him standing in front of the formation and making a whole chapter out of him reflecting on his soon to end life. Vivdly describe his emotions as he looks back on his old life and his hopes looking forward on his new life, maybe with a couple of philosophical questions everyone would have in this situation and there you go: You got all your information which you wanted to pump into your reader, while still making your character relatable and without putting off a lot of readers. I am pretty sure you lost at least a fourth of your potential readers in the prologue.

What a twist

hahahahah this chapter's ending is EPIC!!~

I salute that man for nailing his daughter ∠(^ー^)

Ignoring the grammar issues, you hooked me with the story. Hope to see more!

Definitely could use some grammar work as well as some alteration to the flow. Especially at the end there. Seemed... mmmmm rather rushed has me interested though

Ohhh the author surely watch the death note hahahah

The end was powerful lmao noice

If only for the end joke... This chapter is worth 5stars.

lol

A bit confused with the dates and time intervals otherwise I find it pretty interesting

1

😂😂😂🤣👍

thanks for the chapter

Lol