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It's a good plot. Football (*ahem* soccer *ahem*) plus system is a good combination. Writing quality is good as well, no errors that will disrupt the reading experience. But the story feels a bit rushed, like the author is trying to cram everything into one chapter. It is detailed yet very fast-paced. I don't get much breathing room with one action after another. The plot device is forced as well. No mother in the world would take the words of her six-year-old child seriously, especially if it involves his future. I understand the plot won't go forward if it's not done this way but I just have a hard time accepting that. World building is Earth so there's no flaw to point out. Character design is decent as well. Overall, this is a good novel, I'm looking forward to seeing what kind of developments the author would show later.
This story is highly amusing and pretty f*cking funny. The characters are consistent and the plot is fascinating. Vocabulary use is overall okay, but the writing style makes up for it as it is amausing in its own right. Additionally, I noticed a lot of competitor sport stories in the category tend to lack in the actual competitive sports department, but this story remains true and keeps the sports as the main plot device. Some people may say frequent updating is necessary, but the way I see it, I rather have good content every few weeks than a poorly developed chapter everyday. Keep up the great work!
The language (English) is bad, but you can force yourself to read it. Then you get a little story which is not too bad. There are some books which you really can't read because of the bad English, this is not that bad. Nearly that bad, but not yet. If you have an alternative, read that. If you are very bored, try this.