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warning....this is basically wish fulfillment [tag is not there right now ] MC is a retard. This dude has a modified OP library of heavens path, the power of creation [complete one] and a system with a store....he wastes a wish on looking good. so yah. And seeing as this is danmanchi I think it might be weird, especially with the retard MC. the chicks all wet themselves, character interactions are plot forced and bland, MC has no purpose not a review, just a friendly warning? Author ur interactions....if forced, this ruins ur bk author man, work on it and take it slow, GL..

What I'll say first is ... the fanfic is good. Why? - Well, I'll tell you the 3 wishes the way I read it. 1.-The MC wanted to have a [System] like in any other fanfic, except that he asked God that said system did not have the mission / quest function. 2.- Here the MC asked God to grant him [Creation Magic] (he cannot create 'life' but he can create many other things, I want you to understand this is creation magic, it focuses specifically on 'Create', and not in giving into existence what one imagines as the arc of embodiment, it also has to have enough energy for what it creates. 3.- Here the MC wished the library of the path of heaven with all the knowledge of the multiverse (I hope you understand that he did not ask for a golden finger and then you're go on saying that why he does not use something that he does not even have, ok?). And finally, since the MC was in the form of a soul and God had to create his body to transport him to the world, the MC asked him as a request (after all, he spent his wishes) to make him handsome as a 'Cadis Etrama Of Raizel Noblesse'. Here image: https://i.pinimg.com/originals/ec/1e/ca/ec1eca68d6272684c1394fa2336f3a41.jpg

I can't think of anyone actually liking this. Like seriously guys are you that desperate for anything to read at all that you are praising him to make him keep writing ? Holy Shit.

Well we have been warned everything was only for fulfillment though the author just wants to create things that he wants to go his way sometimes its better to read crap to enjoy rather than reading something that the readers just keep telling which ends as a story of a surpressed mc all the time because of nerfs well who hates overpowered main characters anyways just enjoy this shit rather than spouting bullshit

The characters are hollow you didn't capture any of their personalities, nobody is curious or cunning. Mc does whatever he wants and no one reacts. I applaud you for having the ability to write as many words as you have without a concrete story. Aside from mc no one has a soul it's boring.

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Honestly it's all over the place. Im not an author and I dont think I can write something that can become popular. but I mean, no offence, but even I can write better than this. what Im trying to say is there are so many holes in this story. too little important information here, too much useless information there, stuff like that. and I feel 90% of the characters are changed, their personalities aren't as concrete as I remember.

Keep going and don't stop this until you give us a proper ending.. ..................................... ............ . . . . . . . . .

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this ais a good fanfic it is not shifty like he said i like wish fulfillment stories anyways I just wish he would to get more skill,bloodlineor item quickly

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