You can make it more engaging by creating a vivid setting. If it's in a post - apocalyptic world, describe the desolate environment and how it affects the birth. If it's in a more normal - but - still - alone - situation, like in an empty house, describe the small details of the place. And use dialogue, even if it's just the character talking to herself or the unborn baby. It can bring the story to life.
Add some mystery elements. For example, the reason why the character is giving birth alone can be a mystery that unfolds throughout the story. It can keep the readers hooked.
Develop a strong emotional arc for the character. Let the readers feel the fear, pain, and hope of the character. Describe in detail the internal thoughts and feelings during the birth process. Also, introduce some side characters, even if they are not physically present but are in the character's thoughts, like an absent partner or a lost family member. This can add more depth to the story.
Adding vivid descriptions of the emotions involved can make it more engaging. For example, describe the mother's fear, the father's anxiety.
To make it more impactful, focus on the emotions of the characters. Really dig deep into the grief of the loved ones left behind. For example, show the father's heartbreak in vivid detail.
Snape would probably use his knowledge of potions. He might have brewed a special pain - relieving potion in advance. He would also use his Occlumency skills to try and block out some of the pain mentally. Since he is a strong - willed character, he would grit his teeth and endure it as best he could while focusing on the task at hand, which is giving birth safely.
There would be a sense of loneliness. Hermione is used to having friends around, and in this situation, she has to face this life - changing event all by herself. She might also feel a sense of regret, thinking about how things could have been different if she had made different choices.
A prevalent theme in this type of fanfiction could be survival. The woman giving birth alone has to figure out how to deal with the medical aspects as well as keep herself and the baby safe. There could also be a theme of unexpected help, like a mysterious figure showing up at the last moment to assist, which adds an element of surprise and hope to the story.
It might be related to the theme of secrecy in the fanfiction. Draco may be keeping his pregnancy a secret for various reasons, like protecting his child from certain people or powers. Giving birth alone ensures that the secret is maintained until he's ready to reveal it on his own terms.
Magic would surely play a big role. She could use a spell to numb the pain, like a modified version of the 'Relashio' spell but for pain relief. Also, she might use her Patronus to keep her company and give her the emotional support she needs during the difficult time.
Involving other characters in an interesting way can make it more engaging. Maybe there's a character who is trying to understand what the baby is experiencing during hypnosis. They could be an older sibling or a parent. Their reactions and attempts to communicate with the baby can add depth to the story. Also, creating a sense of mystery around the hypnosis itself, like not revealing all at once why the baby was hypnotized or what the full extent of its effects are, can keep the readers hooked.
Adding a lot of vivid descriptions. For example, if the story is set in a forest, describe the lush greenery, the sounds of the animals, and the smell of the damp earth. This makes the setting more real for the readers.
To make a 'Naruto is heartbroken' fanfiction more engaging, focus on his emotions deeply. Describe how his heartbreak affects his daily life, like he might stop eating or training. Also, add some flashbacks to happier times to contrast with his current state.